Remember when I wrote that really long sentence?

Remember when I wrote that 106-word sentence? I wrote another one! Even longer! This week, as part of the class I’m taking (called masterful sentences, oddly enough) we mimicked Hemingway and his +400 word sentence, which you can see here. (Scroll down to #3. I’m not going to post it here-dude, that’s longer than most of my blog entries.).

So part of the assignment was to write a 400 – 500 word sentence-and have it make sense. I did the first part at least. I wrote a 490-word monstrosity.

In the process, I think I broke Microsoft Word.

Walk for Animals

walk1 Yes, we’ve been busy with projects here at Chez Tahmaseb. We’ve been bagging and baking, and now walking.

Well, actually, Andrew has been doing most of these things.

For thirty five years, our local Animal Humane Society has sponsored the Walk for Animals. Since we adopted Oreo from there last September, Andrew thought this would be a neat way to give back.

Behold! Gratuitous cat photos!

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 Ahem. Anyway, Andrew’s goal is to raise $500.00. If you’d like to help, click the link below.

Andrew’s donation page at Walk for Animals. (Click the Support Andrew button on the page.)

And thanks!

Great Harvest = Great Time

Today, Andrew and I volunteered as part of the “Baker of the Day” program at Great Harvest Bread Company. A great, if exhausting, time was had by all. We worked the ten to one shift, which gave us a lot to do. Next time, I think we’ll pick an earlier shift so we can help more with the mixing and baking (I’m not really into counter work).

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Wow. Attitude boy.

The rest of the pictures after the cut.

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Writing wrong yet again

So I’m taking this writing class called Masterful Sentences which is about … wait for it … sentence structure. Yeah, you didn’t see that coming.

Anyway, as part of this week’s assignment, I have a choice between “offering corrections to phrase and clauses wherever you see you can improve it” on A Christmas Carol by Charles Dickens or diagramming several sentences from A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce.

That’s sort of like the choice between a chocolate chip cookie and chewing on some crushed glass.

Personally, I don’t think Dickens needs “improving,” and I gave Joyce the old college try. Then I ran back to Dickens, asked for forgiveness, and was extremely proud of myself that I didn’t substitute “Dude, check it!” for “Mind!” in the second paragraph of the story.

Geek Girl Update

While Darcy slipped off the front page, you can see a few excerpts from her interview over at Geek Girl’s Guide.

Front page news

It’s all the news that you can’t see! And neither can I. But if you visit Darcy’s local paper, at least for a little while, you’ll see she’s on the front page!

The News-Sun (scroll down).

Unfortunately, unless you have a subscription, all you can see is the teaser. And yes, I am thinking about subscribing for a month, just so I can see it. Why do you ask?

This article was written by one of the teens we’ve highlighted over on the Geek Girl’s site, so it’s doubly exciting.

Review: Tamar, by Mal Peet

wwiiWar Through the Generations Reading Challenge

Tamar: A Novel of Espionage, Passion, and Betrayal
By Mal Peet

When her grandfather dies, Tamar inherits a box containing a series of clues and coded messages. Out of the past, another Tamar emerges, a man involved in the terrifying world of resistance fighters in Nazi-occupied Holland half a century before. His story is one of passionate love, jealousy, and tragedy set against the daily fear and casual horror of the Second World War — and unraveling it is about to transform Tamar’s life forever.

tamarIn the fall of 1944, Tamar and Dart, two Dutch SOE operatives, parachute into Holland. Tamar has the thankless task of organizing the fractured Dutch resistance. Dart is his wireless operator, a job with the average lifespan of three months in Nazi-occupied territory.

In the spring of 1995, Tamar, a fifteen year old girl living in London, is reeling from the possible suicide of her grandfather and a few years before, her father’s disappearance.

It’s difficult to review Tamar without giving away any of the plot twists, one of which I figured out very early in the novel. Even so, the suspense remained high and I wanted to see how the story played out. The parts of the story that dealt with the resistance and life in Nazi-occupied Holland were intense. I was white-knuckled during many of the scenes.

By contrast, Tamar of 1995 was jarring–at first. Tamar is a somewhat prickly first person narrator, although we soon learn she has good reason to be. Her father disappeared a few years ago, her mother works constantly and is remote, and her grandfather’s death may or may not have been a suicide.

As the story progressed, I started to really enjoy the segments in Tamar’s point of view. When Tamar’s distant cousin (emphasis on distant) enters the picture, we get not only his sharp observations but some comic relief. (And for you romantics, the hint of a love story.)

I loved the characterization in the novel. The bits and pieces of character information that surfaced during the novel made it all the more real. From Pieter  and Bibi at the Marionette House (who have a secret of their own) to the driver of SS General Hanns Albin Rauter’s car, who wonders if his beautiful Austrian fiancée will still love him now that he’s lost an ear to frostbite on the Eastern front.

Mal Peet worked actual events into the story, such as the ill-fated and accidental attack on Rauter’s car that resulted in the death of more than 250 men and Gestapo prisoners. 116 of those men were executed on the actual site of the ambush.

After witnessing the mass execution, Tamar returns to Marijke, the woman he loves, and they have this conversation:

“… We tell ourselves we’re different from them. That we’re not like the Nazis. But this morning, I watched while they murdered a hundred and sixteen people. So I wanted to kill them. The sickness in those men, those Germans? It’s in me, too.

She said, “Yes, it probably is. And that’s why we’re fighting, remember? We’re fighting for the right to choose not to be evil.”

He pulled his hand free of hers. “I’m not sure. I don’t know if we can be good after all this.”

“I don’t know either, but that’s not what I said.”

This, I think, is one of the essential messages of the novel, one that resonates today.

It’s also why I feel strongly, especially in retrospect, that the segments in 1995 work so well. War doesn’t end with surrender or victory. The repercussions go on, from generation to generation, in ways we see, and in ways we don’t.

Spies like us

The kids, at long last, have invented a game they both enjoy. For a while, every time they played stuff animals together, epic battles ensued. Andrew wanted conflict, villains, pummeling! And it’s not that Kyra’s scenarios lacked conflict, it’s just more on an interpersonal (or inter-stuffed animal, I guess) level.

The girl-drama bored Andrew; the pummeling frustrated Kyra.

 So now they play spies. How they hit upon this, I’m not sure, but every night (right around bedtime, of course) the spy missions start.

I’m generally their object of spying. Their mission is to get by me, around me, hide from me. How good are they at this?

Not very.

Andrew gets frustrated with Kyra’s lack of subtlety, but this is the boy who thinks if he situates his slippers so they stick out from beneath a lumpy blanket, I’ll think he’s under the blanket.

So, in other words, Pot, Kettle, I’d like you two to meet. You have something in common.

In Geek Girl News, we have a new feature up on the Geek Girl website called You Don’t Have to Wait, where we feature teens who are going after their dreams. And if you know a teen who is pursuing a goal or going after a dream, let us know. We’d love to feature them.